The following is my part on the ongoing discussion we were having regarding the story, at least as far as documented on the blog (most of it was unfortunately carried in real time, undocumented, as most good ideas are born):
Hey guys, the class is in that editing room with the macs next to foundation.
I like red river as a name, it works quite nicely.
Nate I quite like where you're going with this, the only thing that I'm concerned about is that the good guy, our hero, doesn't achieve anything, doesn't overcome anything, and doesn't really get tested. He comes to the story as the saint and leave it the same, and so the story seems to not have any meaning for him or affect him in any way. And as for the greedy, it feels like he starts off as self-serving, and finishes self serving.
It seems like we're going for a bit of a fable-like story in here, which is nice (might even work with narration), but the big thing about fables is that the character learns a valuable lesson. Don't wanna change the story too much, but maybe we'll make it about the bad guy, and him learning the valuable lesson?
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